As for actual me, my name is Isaac. I'm an electrician by day, mad scientist beer brewer by night. I'm 29, married but no kids yet. I've been playing RPGs in one form or another for about 15 years, although I've only been playing with rules since last year. I primarily play D&D so this will be my first Travelling experience.
Posted on 2014-05-08 at 21:48:08.
Edited on 2014-05-08 at 21:48:32 by Schnozzle
First: on your characteristics, you have Dexterity 6 with a (-1) modifier. Note that characteristics on the 6-8 range have no modifier at all;
Second: note that your "TL14 Computer/5", at that weight, is a Hand Computer, not a HUD, Wafer Jack, Computer Terminal or similar. The total mass is also off by 0.5kg, but meh;
Third: on the character creation record, it's noted you gained Engineer (any) at both your first and second terms, yet in the end, you only have Engineer (life support) 1. You should have either a second rank of Engineer (life support), or one of Engineer (m-drive, j-drive, electronics or power);
Fourth: similarly, you gained a full rank of Language (any) at your last term, yet noted it as 0 instead of 1 and specialized;
Fifth: again on the CCR, you mention gaining Admin at third term, yet the skill is nowhere to be seen;
Sixth: again on the CCR, you listed out 3 instances of gaining Life Science, yet in the end you have Life Science 4. Basic training, which is 0 skill level, doesn't count towards positive levels. Unless, of course, this is your extra (package/solo) skill, connection skill or similar. I suspect, however, your extra skill is Gun Combat (slug pistols), as I didn't see mention of you acquiring it anywhere;
Seventh: on the matter of Gun Combat, however you may have acquired it, it can't be specialized and level 0. You either have non-specialized Gun Combat 0, or specialized Gun Combat (slug pistols) 1;
Eighth: like 6th, you gained 1 instance of Computers at fourth term, and ended up with Computers 2. Remember basic training is 0, and 0+1=1. Or, again, this could be an extra skill;
Ninth: you mentioned mustering out a scientific toolkit, yet it is not listed on your belongings. Careful not to forget about it, and note that it does weigh 12kg.
That is all I could find that seems wrong. One other suggestion, though, is to scratch that "equipment/belongings" sheet from the first page and list everything at the second page. As of now, your two equipment lists are inconsistent with one another, each having items the other doesn't. But it's not really -wrong-!
Posted on 2014-05-09 at 18:27:42.
Edited on 2014-05-10 at 05:12:14 by Amathiel